Beta request for Monkey Island
Dec. 8th, 2021 12:24 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
arcanetriviaETA: I am in contact with someone now. Thanks!
Fandom: Monkey Island
Characters/Pairings: Guybrush Threepwood, Elaine Marley, Hugo (MI4), Yangja (MI4), Mungle (MI4), Miss Rivers (MI4), two OCs, cameo from the Barbery Coast pirates (MI3). Mostly gen, with a little canonish Guybrush/Elaine fluff.
Rating & Warnings: Pretty low rating, maybe PG; peril, some references to violence, one character being a creep, and like two mildly sexually suggestive lines.
Estimated Fic Length: 20,750 (already completed)
Notes: Familiarity with the source a plus, but not 100% required since my strongest concerns are not to do with canonicity nor characterization (although a second opinion on those would be good if I can get it). No SPAG check needed. I need to know: is the story actually entertaining or just long and dull; is there enough humor, and is the humor actually funny; did I avoid obviously running on adventure game "plot time" (plot events are not triggered until the player figures out the correct action); is the main threat OK; some style things about revealing mental state of non-POV characters; is one OC's mode of speech okay or did I merely succeed at othering them or possibly even coming off racist; is the ending okay or is it a lame ripoff even by Monkey Island standards.
Fandom: Monkey Island
Characters/Pairings: Guybrush Threepwood, Elaine Marley, Hugo (MI4), Yangja (MI4), Mungle (MI4), Miss Rivers (MI4), two OCs, cameo from the Barbery Coast pirates (MI3). Mostly gen, with a little canonish Guybrush/Elaine fluff.
Rating & Warnings: Pretty low rating, maybe PG; peril, some references to violence, one character being a creep, and like two mildly sexually suggestive lines.
Estimated Fic Length: 20,750 (already completed)
Notes: Familiarity with the source a plus, but not 100% required since my strongest concerns are not to do with canonicity nor characterization (although a second opinion on those would be good if I can get it). No SPAG check needed. I need to know: is the story actually entertaining or just long and dull; is there enough humor, and is the humor actually funny; did I avoid obviously running on adventure game "plot time" (plot events are not triggered until the player figures out the correct action); is the main threat OK; some style things about revealing mental state of non-POV characters; is one OC's mode of speech okay or did I merely succeed at othering them or possibly even coming off racist; is the ending okay or is it a lame ripoff even by Monkey Island standards.
